The Way I Treat My Future Children
My parents were busy of seeking a lot money for this family. My father usually came back home late at night. My mother was also busy of being housewife. They had no enough time to talk with me when I was in kindergarten. That is why I am being quite enough person. Then, I have future plans to treat my children later on. I will not treat my children like what my parents did. My children have to know how to communicate with parents well. After they grew up I plan to enrol them to join education in Oxford University. In Oxford, they wil get a lot of advantages from their study of western culture that the children need to be active in making friend or relation in order to make the life better. So that, they are easier to seek job during their study aboard and get experience. Those are my future plans for my children when I have already got children and treat them better than my parents
tenth line: 'study abroad' (typo) and 'get a lot of experiences' or 'get an experience' ( you can choose one). That's an awesome plan for your children to get them school in Oxford Univ. Thx
ReplyDeleteyou're doing good but, i want to add correction. in the line7, you should add come. you should write ''After they grew up, I plan to enrol them to join education in.....'' great plan panji
ReplyDelete@Dian: Thanks a lot for your awesome suggestion and correction
ReplyDelete@Agus : Thank you Agus